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Afternoon Adventure {100 words}

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Laura took Aidan’s hand willingly, trusting he wouldn’t harm her. Her father would have called her a fool. Shaking off the sense of loathing his memory brought she focused on where Aidan was leading her.

“It’s been abandoned for years,” he said, drawing back a thick branch. “I’d love to try and get it working again.”

Stepping out into a small clearing Laura smiled at the sight of the rustic mill straddling the narrow creek. It was like something from a postcard.

“To do what?” She ran a hand along a sun warmed plank.

Aidan shrugged. “Maybe to just prove I can.”

copyright John Nixon

copyright John Nixon

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For this week’s Friday Fictioneers image and Velvet Verbosity’s word: Mill

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Author: Carrie

Married 30-something with 2 girls. Living in a house under constant renovation. Trying to reignite my creative writing flame :)

23 thoughts on “Afternoon Adventure {100 words}

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  2. Love that last line. Such a romantic statement.

  3. aidan is one of the most complex and oddly rootable characters you’ve ever created.

    strong 100

  4. Now that he has not chopped her into pieces, he seems like a nice guy. Maybe she was right to follow him then. Sometimes we need to follow our heart and not what people tell us to do.

  5. I think Aidan is one of the good guys. Lovely not to have the usual dark twist – it’s a happy twist instead!

  6. I like that. Sweet story without any murderous twists! lol Nice job.

  7. I greatly enjoyed this. Beautifully descriptive and so full of wonder and hope. I love how it just flowed so naturally and didn’t seem forced. Wonderfully written piece!

  8. I really like your story. I was afraid it was going to end in tragedy but you took a different route. Great take on the prompt.

  9. Dear Carrie,

    Love the way you layered this piece, thus packing a lot of story into the allotted word count. Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  10. love the last line :) Aidan sounds like a nice guy

  11. I like the “sun warmed plank too. Great story. Thanks, Nan :)

  12. Loved the last line…we should always be looking to prove we can even if it’s just to ourselves :)

  13. I hate that her and her father’s relationship is one of loathing. I hope he is a live because time can heal it.

  14. The feeling in this is so layered.. there is a slight threat in the beginning… but in the end it ends with a kind of wisdom. that might be a characterdescription saying she made the right choice.. at least that’s what I’m reading into it.

  15. Great description. Makes us feel that we’re seeing a picture. And I love his reasoning.

  16. I like this story. It’s very visual. I really liked ” ran a hand along the sun-warmed plank too!”

  17. I like the theory: “just to see if I can”.

  18. Carrie, I like the feel of this story and the ambition and love you showed. If you’d like an extra word, “sun-warmed” (which I hope to be today!!) has a hyphen. :-)

    janet

  19. Such a lot of back story in this short piece Well done.

  20. I like your blog. You should check out some of the work on my blog lilybunny.com let me know what you think and maybe follow if you like :)

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