image from Madison Woods
“The itsy bitsy spider…”
“Seriously, you’re going there?”
Anna turned with a mischievous grin. Her roommate Crystal rolled her eyes and moved closer to the webs stretching across the path. “Can we just capture the little creepy crawly and get back to the dorm? I’m freezing.”
“You can’t rush science.” Anna waved a hand in Crystal’s face. “Let me get a good picture first.”
She stepped closer and raised the camera up. A drop of water fell in her eye and she stumbled forward, crashing into the delicate strands. “Shit!”
“It’s for the best. That little black bastard was about to drop on you.” Crystal pointed to the venomous diver bomber swinging in the breeze.
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It’s Friday Fictioneer time. This little flash brought to your courtesy of Madison Wood’s image choice this week. Click through to read the other stories
September 18, 2012 at 2:50 am
Dear Carrie,
First two lines are classic. Good job.
Aloha,
doug
September 17, 2012 at 7:14 am
so much in so few words.
These girls sound like mine. Sassy and funny and adventurous.
September 16, 2012 at 4:20 pm
You captured the different personalities of the two girls. Good development of the story line.
September 14, 2012 at 11:26 pm
well done.
September 14, 2012 at 5:45 pm
Yuck and yuck! Well done, it made my skin crawl. I don’t even want to know what they were doing out there, I am just glad they got out. Shiver.
September 14, 2012 at 1:26 pm
Ooh, creepy. I want to know why they were in the woods so late at night.
September 14, 2012 at 9:54 am
I’m not too concerned about spiders, expect for fiddlebacks (Brown Recluse) and they don’t spin webs.
I just wonder what scientific experiment these girls were up to?
September 14, 2012 at 6:39 am
Haha! I love that it starts with Itsy Bitsy Spider, moves to water in her eye, and ends with the possibility of the spider washing her out if the water hadn’t come along.
September 14, 2012 at 6:56 am
Would you believe that is completely unintentional? Cause it wasn’t. Oh yeah, i am THAT clever…not
September 14, 2012 at 5:43 am
Hey, the spider was just protecting its home!! I thought it was an engaging story that seemed very realistic.
September 14, 2012 at 6:56 am
True, how would we feel if someone bulldozed OUR home? Thanks for reading
September 14, 2012 at 2:35 am
Splat! As you can see, I’d take the picture first and swat later.
Entertaining read.
September 14, 2012 at 6:57 am
Yeah, me too
thanks for stopping by
September 13, 2012 at 11:53 pm
Hope she managed to avoid getting bitten! A well told story. Mine is here http://anneorchardwriter.wordpress.com/2012/09/14/friday-fictioneers-late-getting-home/
September 13, 2012 at 11:24 pm
Ick. You’ve got me swatting the air around me.
September 14, 2012 at 6:58 am
The cloying feeling of webbing all over your face…yuck
September 13, 2012 at 11:17 pm
I agree with Angel, great dialogue. Well done!
September 14, 2012 at 6:58 am
Thank you!
September 13, 2012 at 10:26 pm
the drop of water, i can’t help thinking what it is and where it dropped from…my eyes itch! Nice one Carrie!
September 13, 2012 at 9:40 pm
I like how natural the dialogue is here. There’s some great imagery, like with the drop of water in her eye. I cold visualize and even feel it.
September 13, 2012 at 9:42 pm
thanks for reading
September 13, 2012 at 9:40 pm
cute story… Randy