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Trifecta: Moving on


Jeff paused at the entry to the kitchen silently observing his mother seated at the table. His father’s urn sat next to her plate, gleaming in the low morning light, and a pile of mail graced the opposite side. A single sheet of paper shook in Elinor’s long skeletal fingers. She sighed and placed it down gently, smoothing the creases as he took a seat across from her.

“Morning, Mom. What’s that?” He gestured to the discarded letter. World weary eyes met his, a smile fighting to show itself on her age ravaged skin. She waved a hand over the letter.

“Nothing, really. It’s not as if I didn’t expect this…” She took a deep breath, dabbing her eyes with her napkin. “It’s from the bank. The sale has been finalized on the farm.” Her lip trembled and tears clung to her lashes. “I know it has to be this way…we couldn’t keep it in the family forever…”

Jeff clutched his mother’s delicate hand in his own, his blocky, square tipped fingers reminiscent of his late father’s. “It’ll be okay, Mom. I-“

Elinor cut him off, a forced expression of cheerfulness gracing her elegant profile as she glanced over at the clock. “Pshaw, don’t molly-coddle a melodramatic old woman.” She met his gaze again and her lips curved up. “Besides, who’d want that old dinosaur anyway? Barn’s crumbling, house needs new plumbing…I’m glad I never have to use that dastardly antique of a stove again!”

Jeff raised an eyebrow at his mother’s sudden about face. “Are you sure you’re okay with this Mom? Ready to let go?”

“Yes,” she said, her fingers lightly stroking the urn. “It was time.”

“Well, that’s unfortunate.” Jeff pushed up from the table.

“Why do you say that?”

“Because I’m the new owner of the property.” Jeff placed a kiss on her brow. “I was hoping you’d show me how to work that old stove.”  He smiled at the tears of happiness trickling down her cheeks.

 This flash fiction brought to you by Trifecta and their word of the week: Dinosaur 3: one that is impractically large, out-of-date, or obsolete

Author: Carrie

Married 30-something with 2 girls. Living in a house under constant renovation. Trying to reignite my creative writing flame :)

22 thoughts on “Trifecta: Moving on

  1. What a sweet piece!

  2. That was an unexpected ending. Great job! I got a little choked up at the sweet gesture, I think because I have two young boys and I hope that they would treat me well when I’m an old dinosaur. (Well, they think I’m a dinosaur right now, but that doesn’t count :))

  3. Now that is a good son. What a sweet take on the prompt. Thanks for joining us again. Please come on back for the new challenge tomorrow.

  4. Very touching. When i reached the part about her putting on a brave face, i was fervently hoping that some miracle would happen towards the end… And it did :)

  5. Beautifully done Carrie. Such nice imagery! :D

  6. Oh what a delightful twist! That gave me goosebumps. I love how Jeff played his hand.

  7. Oh how sweet and such a wonderful ending. She putting on a brave face and then the tears of joy when she realized that she didn’t really have to let that “old dinosaur” go. Great job!

  8. Beautifully written and poignant. Everything everybody else said too!!

  9. Wonderful, sweet, and well written. Thanks for this :)

  10. A tender, sweet moment between a son and mother. I loved the ending.

  11. This is a wonderful story–good job.

  12. very impactful

    I wish molly-coddle had been the word. Because it’s awesome.

    well written Carrie…almost as good as your husband (joking)

  13. that made me cry a little as well. she put on such a brave face! i love this piece.

  14. Oh!! *grabs a tissue* You got me!! And wow! Was that ending a punch ( a good one!!) You really captured that emotion well. Incredibly awesome flash!

  15. I cried reading this. Great writing!

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