“I’m not sure. When I found her she was burning up.”
Laura struggled to focus on the voices floating through the air above her. It sounded like Beth but who was she speaking to? A murmur and Beth spoke again.
“Soon, I guess? She hasn’t been able to have proper doctor care…”
Laura felt herself floating. A tightening sensation around her fingers lifted. She forced her eyes open to see Beth peering down at her.
“I’m here Laura. Okay? We’re at the hospital. You’re sick.” Fear pinched Beth’s face. “Can you hear me?” Her face disappeared from Laura’s field of vision but the tightening returned around her fingers. Laura squeezed back.
“The doctors need to check you, make sure the baby is okay…Laura?”
Agonizing pain raged through Laura’s body as her lower body became drenched in fluid. She screamed as a vice clamped down on her abdomen. A man in a white coat was by her side, hands pressed along her belly.
“Her water has broken, she’s in labor.” The doctor turned to Beth. “You’ll need to step out of the room, Miss.”
“No!” Laura croaked, tightening her grip on Beth’s hand. The nurse stepped in and took Laura’s other hand.
“There there, dear. You’ll be fine. Let’s have this baby and your sister can come right back, okay.” Her soothing voice blanketed Laura in a sense of calm. She felt Beth’s fingers slip free.
Another contraction stole Laura’s attention away from Beth’s retreating figure. She cried out, her body twisting and contorting on the bed. Another nurse took hold of her free hand while a third positioned her feet into stirrups at the end of the bed. A flurry of activity swirled about her but Laura could only think of the pain ripping through her. As the pain ebbed away she felt herself sliding away. At the edge of consciousness she could hear the voices, distant and removed, discuss her as if she wasn’t there.
“She has a fever.”
“Start a saline drip”
“Contractions less than a minute apart.”
“Fully dilated.”
“The baby is crowning.”
Through it all the pain was unending. Laura struggled to stay focused on the here and now but her mind kept drifting. To memories of Beth, of her mother, of Isabelle…but mostly Aidan.
“Ai-i-i-i-i-d-a-a-a-a-a-a-n!” Her scream echoed in the stark hospital room coupled with a loud tearing noise and then an ear piercing shriek.
“Congratulations. It’s a girl.” The nurse brought forth a bloody mess wrapped in a sterile white blanket. In a fever induced haze Laura stared uncomprehendingly at this squirming mass presented to her. A tiny face screwed up in anger, miniscule fists shaking, and lungs that could put an opera singer to shame.
The eyes opened and locked onto Laura’s own. She felt herself begin to shake as the fever clamped down and then everything went black.
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For the Red Writing Hood prompt this week: write about a face to face meeting which, for better or for worse, doesn’t go as planned. Fiction or memoir, 450 words.
This follows Sinking in Oblivion. I’m just making assumptions but I doubt this was the face-to-face Laura expected with her new baby

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September 4, 2012 at 10:17 am
I’m a little confused with this story… I seem to be missing how Laura got from being with Aiden (who I do not approve of) and then being found (by Beth I assume) in dire straits and taken to the hospital (or ‘to hospital’ as my neighbors to the north would say). I don’t think the baby girls face was screwed up in ‘anger’ but letting out a big burst to greet the world and Laura. I do hope that Aiden is written out of Laura’s life post haste, and bring back the mean father to get some comeuppance.
I want to compliment the author on the hand written letters that appeared in an earlier installment. I did note the soiled creases in Mama’s letter. Nice handwriting too.
September 4, 2012 at 10:51 am
I emailed you a rundown of what’s happened so far
September 3, 2012 at 5:32 am
Childbirth is a great use of this prompt, because no matter how we prepare, no matter the circumstances, meeting the reality of the child you’ve only known in the silence of your own heart is never exactly what you expect.
September 2, 2012 at 2:53 pm
Oh Em gee. That was some seriously good writing. It moved swiftly, made the whole world disappear. It made me grimace in pain, and my heart hurt. I got scared with the way they made her sister leave that there are ulterior motives at work. Will she remember the baby? Will it be returned to her? I can’t wait to read more.
August 31, 2012 at 10:47 pm
This sounds like it was written from experience (certainly not mine LOL). I really like the “un-romanticized” aspect of childbirth. Also the way things seem to be out of the birth mother’s control. The tone and pacing of the prose is just right for the subject matter. Nice work.
August 31, 2012 at 11:17 am
I like the flow. It fits with the in and out of consciousness well and sets the mood.
My sister-in-law developed extremely high blood pressure and a dangerously high fever when my niece was born. The doctors were concerned for both survival and if I read between the lines, I think they’re lucky to still be kicking. My niece’s teeth never developed enamel as a result of the fever. (At least that’s what the dentist blamed it on). Poor thing has had seven years of the kids at school picking on her because her teeth are brown and see-through as if she never brushed her teeth. They might be able to do something cosmetic to help her when she has all her adult teeth, but right now, it’s too expensive for teeth that aren’t permanent. She also has a speech impediment that’s so unique, the speech therapists don’t know how to correct it, and her tongue is way too big for her mouth. She didn’t say a word until she was about 18 months, she didn’t even babble much until just before then. Very abnormal kid.
Something I thought you might be interested in when/if you develop the characters further.
August 31, 2012 at 8:14 am
That was harrowing. I haven’t read the previous parts, but I feared for Laura and her baby. I’m glad they’re both okay.
August 31, 2012 at 12:05 am
Wow! Stressful reading! (Just kidding…) Love the clarity of your writing. The excerpt made me want to know more!!
stopping by from the RED linkup
August 30, 2012 at 7:18 pm
Oh. Also, my abdominal muscles will not be forgiving soon you for that agonizing reminder of my natural childbirth with Sam. They have decided to hurt all week in vengeance.
August 30, 2012 at 7:17 pm
Oh wow. That was awesome. I’m terrified that
1) The baby will die. They are typically safe from whatever you’re carrying while in utero, but delivering with a high fever can’t be good.
2) That the baby will be stolen. I mean, she’s in a bad place to remember what might come next.
3) That the “lost” is that LAURA will die and Beth will be telling this to the niece she’s raised as her own.
August 30, 2012 at 7:41 pm
Well, to ease your fears the baby won’t die. I can promise you that.
Sorry you are dealing with those phantom memory pains
August 30, 2012 at 5:23 pm
This story is really coming along nicely. Tension-building and it keeps me coming back for more.
August 30, 2012 at 5:15 pm
Wow! That was intense. I hope everything turns out okay with Laura and her baby. On another note, isn’t it interesting how we get attached to characters (even if they aren’t our own) and talk about them as if they’re real people?